How can my father promote his New Orleans towboat pilot relief effort? September 2, 2005 11:35 PM Subscribe
My father is attempting to start a New Orleans relief effort among towboat pilots (he is one himself). He's posted a "call to action" on his site, and I'd like to get the word out. I haven't posted it on the front page because it seems dangerously close to a self-link (and is just one editorial, really). Any suggestions?
how about nola.com? and the times-picayune? they'd cover it, i bet...send an email to them and to the tv and radio stations in the area---they'll mention it too.
posted by amberglow at 1:17 AM on September 3, 2005
posted by amberglow at 1:17 AM on September 3, 2005
You may also want to rewrite the request in the form of a press release. It reads like an editorial -- it needs to be much more plain, concrete, and urgent. You need to cut right to the chase: TOWBOAT CAPTAINS NEEDED FOR RELIEF EFFORT -- immediately followed by the details of where, when, who to call. When asking for help, don't expect your audience to have the patience to read the long chain of reasoning behind it. Just make it clear what you need.
posted by Miko at 6:32 AM on September 3, 2005
posted by Miko at 6:32 AM on September 3, 2005
Speaking as an editor: what Miko said.
posted by languagehat at 6:36 AM on September 3, 2005
posted by languagehat at 6:36 AM on September 3, 2005
Yes, rewrite the sucker and send it to the Times-Picayune, Fox, MSNBC and CNN.
Who: Towboat pilots
What: Fire up the engines
Where: New Orleans
When: NOW
Why is obvious, yet dominates the entire announcement and obscures details of what action is needed.
posted by nyterrant at 7:48 AM on September 3, 2005
Who: Towboat pilots
What: Fire up the engines
Where: New Orleans
When: NOW
Why is obvious, yet dominates the entire announcement and obscures details of what action is needed.
posted by nyterrant at 7:48 AM on September 3, 2005
Wow, nice copy-edits, nyterrant. Hemmingway would be proud.
posted by Civil_Disobedient at 10:58 AM on September 3, 2005
posted by Civil_Disobedient at 10:58 AM on September 3, 2005
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posted by ?! at 11:42 PM on September 2, 2005